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Artist's Comment: a hybrid embellished remnant, this poem is so close to the original, yet so different, i've taken the unusual step of posting the original below the current version
it's not a lot different but enough so, in the slight change of a word here and there, the smoothing of the cadence (showing more my slowing / aging since first written 12 years ago than "improvement" i think :-) that i felt i should post the original in this case
not many of my poems (so far) that i've returned to from during that time have needed an over-haul, but i really wasn't happy with the way this one stood anymore; this happens with my paintings sometimes too, i decide the picture needs a softening here or a touch of blue there, something, though also rarely
this week's batch does though have several that either had a touch-up, or embellishment, or reconstruction; must be getting close to valentine's, all those "heart beats" :-)
(added feb 9 '08): i was so intent in getting this posting up last night and focussed on the prior & current versions, i didn't really comment on the work itself; though it's obvious it applies to an erotic hungering, i remember feeling it also applied to the felt hunger for a new creative work; for me, sometimes a poem, sometimes a painting, sometimes for music or movement (dance)
i also remember, in interpersonal terms, it didn't even necessarily have to be a hunger for someone new, but applied as well to wanting, needing really, a re-connect of an existing relationship; something, it seems, is naturally always gonna be needed time to time in any lasting relationship
the newer version, as i mentioned last night, feels softer to me, more flowing, better cadenced, reflecting my more current preferred emotional mode; it's also slightly more nuanced, which i also like and appreciate more now
the basic point of either version though, that it's better to feel and need and want, than to be dead to life's hungers, is very much intact
related: "digital love"
adan - february 8, 2008 - to "my hungry heart"
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"the act of giving your thoughts to one you love can be as important as
the thought itself" - adan
My Hungry Heart
My heart
hungers for the sun -
my heart lingers for the rains -
to feel warmth, wet upon my arms -
to drink blue mixed deep
with night feeling
light sliding
moving feeding
feelings to my heart.
My heart hungers - my eyes devour.
Is better to have hungered
then starved without love.
© 1996-2008 adam light creations /
adan lerma
[Original]
My Hungry Heart
My heart hungers for the sun -
my heart hungers for the rain -
to feel warmth wet upon my arms -
to drink blue and mix it deep
with the night and feel
light slide down my eyes
to my feet light
and moving
as the
hunger
feeds feeling
after feeling to my heart.
My heart hungers - my eyes devour.
My mind gnaws.
I know - it is better to hunger
than starve.
© 1996 adam light creations / adan lerma
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